Decree...
To A, for all the love and for being able to laugh like poetry.
Perceptions are arbitrary
linens, beneath
gazing we lay
at the distant stars
of life’s night and day
Buried hatchets within we carry
an ache, is not necessarily of a fissure
To stranger smiles we marry
a laugh, does not always belong to pleasure
we are not just men of love
we are not just men of hate
Somewhere we are, also
those unspoken handshakes
of our hearts and minds
Sometime we are, also
those incomplete deeds
we give in to, agreed and unagreed
On those summer nights ahead
when stars drop low by the open window
And we lay many a linens apart
Think of us; if you do
not just by the dark shadows
we hung by the selfish door
but as well by the colourful smiles
we spilled on the spotless floor.
Think of us; when you do
not just of what we held onto dearly so
but also of what we painfully let go....
20 comments:
beautiful yosso...so totally loved ur words.....they somehow reminded me of 'all ye who sleep tonight'....I've no idea why....maybe that sense of painful distance that both of them weave around....or of the inevitable separation that you linger on to, in ur words....
especially loved the end note
Think of us; when you do
not just of what we held onto dearly so
but also of what we painfully let go....
enig
This is beautiful
oh man enig beat me to it
but I too loved these lines
Think of us; when you do
not just of what we held onto dearly so
but also of what we painfully let go....
very poignant and they really touch.
yoss!
i really loved this one...
Sometime we are, also
those incomplete deeds
we give in to, agreed and unagreed
sigh!
but as well by the colourful smiles
we spilled on the spotless floor.
this is beautiful use of ordinary words, images... and of course the last couplet...
asuph.
Think of us; when you do
not just of what we held onto dearly so
but also of what we painfully let go...
Oh my, Uber. I feel like a mouse all over again. :-)
Kanurite and bilbs,
Thank you.
enig! Seth? flattered.:)I always value your comments, perhaps what I try to do in 'my' post , you honestly convey in 'your' comment.
And thats how we talk.
Asuph thanks indeed for such kind words, the last lines have shared unintended limelight!
extempore,
There you have me!
Who be the mouse who be the hamlyn now?:)
Whoever A is i thank the(m) for the inspiration! :)
well done ! :)
the past hour has been a most pleasurable experience .. (have been going through your past posts!) :)
and my fav stanza is the
"buried hatchets within we carry ..
"
exemplifies the tediousness and the burden of untimely politeness we all carry ! :)
however for some critique :( (apologies if this sounds amateurish!)
it seems like the last two stanzas were written first and then the overlying linen was laid.
don't now what the trick is to make it seem less contrived ... but then that's the trick i guess!
Oh this was Doh Btw ..dunno why im showing up as RVW :(
hmm.
well, thanks doh.
I see your view point but i started with perceptions are arbitrary...
i dont regard any critique as amateurish, but where is the critique,i see only perception.
cheers
finny,
japanese ?
do we have to dearly hold on, and/or painfully let go?
those are the only lines i could understand here...
hey quirky
thanks
no big deal! be zen
where art thou, yosso....how cum nothing from u since more than a month :(
enig!
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I should like to add my voice to the requests for a new post. Being a mouse is very rewarding around this space. :-)
Hey enig, dreamer n extempore:
Thanks , feels nice and flattered.
Was away and since being back have been all over the place.Seems this would be so for a while, shall try and post if time n space permits.
cheers
dreamer?
You like Norah Jones? pardon me if im wrong?
nasra that you are,
shall surely check out once a bit free.Thanks
uve been tagged. as i said
I too join in the refrain for more posting, Ubermensch. Your style is so unique and very much missed.
Sure finny, am i given some time?
Hi les,
Thnaks for the comment.Shall try being regular. AS for being unique, who isnt?
Twins, maybe? :)
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